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No place to hide.
(I can't fight).
No place to feel safe.
Are you scared?
You should be.
(Can you feel me?)
There are creatures in the darkness that want to tear you apart.
(Do you hate me?)
The pain that will go through your body when you get to feel them without seeing them.
The pain is endless.
I'll promise you that you won't survive.
(Save me?)
Is your heart beating faster?
It should, my dear.
You can't hide.
(I need to get out).
They are getting closer.
Oh, my dear.
Are you scared?
You should cry and now you wonder why..
Don't look back.
(Don't ask me why)
They are here, my love.
They are here.
(I can't feel).
(I can't see).
This is the day.
Now you don't have to hide.
I know that you ain't scared.
I know that you don't fear.

You're standing on my grave.
Only I can't feel the pain.
I'm dead.
I don't care.
I do not feel ashamed.
I did not care at all.
This is the end.

I'll wait for you, my friend.
I will see you once again.
My dear beloved friend.
Let us meet once again.
Comment please. Good, bad. It's all welcomed.
The grammar probably ain't the best so if there's something I need to change feel free to tell me
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LaylaStark Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
You seem to have a specific theme you love going with and it's with things that go bump in the night. Your poems all have the same feel to them that illustrates the narrator's fear. I like the words in the parenthesis. They add an extra layer to the poem.
Valentine-Vladicvik Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist
Thanks ^^
LaylaStark Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012
You're welcome
10kdays Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There's something in this poem that scares me. I like reading scary poems. I love how it's like there's the narrator talking to someone and they're all like "they're here my dear" and the next "they want to tear you apart!" :)
Valentine-Vladicvik Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist
Thanks ^^
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